Thanks for reading and re-stacking. It's interesting that you mentioned it. Sarah said something similar about the story feeling like a book condensed into a short story. Now I need to condense it into a flash fiction piece to see if maybe folks read it.
The first part was, I felt, hilarious. The second was such a cautionary tale. The only thing I'd like to see is a more fluid transition from Part 1 to Part 2. (A short one, so you don't take away from the strong advantages of the two parts.) But that's just me. There's a great wit that you're able to generate almost as a 2nd story between the lines. That's a great talent.
Great piece of imagineering. I restacked this with a note that described it as a whole novel in a short story. Alas, Homer isn't "followinng" me yet.
Thanks for reading and re-stacking. It's interesting that you mentioned it. Sarah said something similar about the story feeling like a book condensed into a short story. Now I need to condense it into a flash fiction piece to see if maybe folks read it.
The first part was, I felt, hilarious. The second was such a cautionary tale. The only thing I'd like to see is a more fluid transition from Part 1 to Part 2. (A short one, so you don't take away from the strong advantages of the two parts.) But that's just me. There's a great wit that you're able to generate almost as a 2nd story between the lines. That's a great talent.
Thanks so much for the feedback. I agree on the transition between Part 1 and Part 2. It felt a little rough.
“What negotiation tactics did you use to restore humanity in your team?” Another reporter asked.
“Leadership,” Commander Rooney said.
“Could you be more specific?”
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It's difficult to resist the parallel to a recent debate champion who boasted having "the concept of a plan."
Not an accident!
Great story! I thought it was going to go one way, then bam! Like getting your pet eaten. As Fermi said, but where is everybody??
More importantly, where IS Phil Collins?!!
It is a story very well written and with very good concepts about what is happening in our planet.
Also, the high possibility of life outside our planet.